Monday, May 05, 2008

long time comin'

i just opened up a file on my zip drive and it said i had last accessed it on 5.3.2007. i can hardly believe that because it means i haven't worked on my bip (book-in-progress) in a whole year. how is that even possible? definitely a sign that the past year has passed me by. that doesn't mean that it wasn't a really excellent year (or at least the 9 months before the past three break-up months), but like suebob commented 'keep moving forward'
i'll try.

and without further ado here's the first paragraph of my bip for your consideration.

"Ambrose Dossel hurtled back against the wall from the force of the explosion. His headphones dangled precariously from around his neck, and he felt a little singed around the edges. Not really burnt, the way he liked his hotdogs. It was more of a warm tingly sensation, similar to standing too long in front of an open oven or campfire. Shaking his head to clear his ringing ears, Ambrose cautiously opened his eyes to seek the source of the blast. And then he rubbed them with the back of his hand in disbelief. Before him, in his very own bedroom, sat a strangely glowing object roughly the size and shape of a large soda bottle. It hovered in the midst of scattered books, CDs and the dirty laundry he had neglected to pick up the night before. The glowing shape bobbed a bit as it radiated a wide array of changing colors. Blues and greens, pinks and reds, turquoise and heliotrope flashed on the walls."

btw, if you hadn't noticed, this isn't the great american novel. it's a children's book.

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2 Comments:

At 5/8/08, 2:54 PM, Blogger Suzanne said...

I particularly love the line about the hot dog. It's a very good opening paragraph, and I'm looking forward to reading what happens next.

 
At 5/8/08, 3:16 PM, Blogger mar said...

thanks suzanne, for the comment.
i've written another 600 words this week so far, mostly just tweaking & editing what i already had & hadn't worked on in a year. it was much easier to work on kinks when i'd been away that long.
i like the hotdog line myself. :)
and i would appreciate your input on the nyc & chi parts once i get them down a bit more. the nyc bit is supershort, but a big chunk of the story takes place in chicago. which i should probably visit in the daytime.

 

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